-You are to write 5 separate college entrance essays answering the specific give
-You are to write 5 separate college entrance essays answering the specific given insight question and with the chosen topic.
– Each essay needs have its own Personal insight question.
don’t use any other sources, no citation need,
-I am attaching a few essays as for example purpose only, so you have an idea of what essays that got people accepted at university looks like. look at structure, flow of sentences, how the story tight and how it answers the insight question for each essay.
only to be used for example, don’t copy anything please. ( see UC example essay attachment )
Please make sure to read general information below about the applicant and include the information with your own words, in each essay.
they are all for the same applicant so keep that in mind.
Use easy to understand words correspondent to a typical 17-year-old boy. Please don’t use difficult to understand wording. Keep it simple and straightforward.
Make sure to add each insight question and topic related to each essay as tittle so it’s easy to know each one is which.
First read general information about the applicant. Name, location, are fictional as I will switch later.
MLA format
times new roman,
size 12, double spaced.
1 full page length per each essay ( total 5 essays, unrelated, separate follow each designated insight question and given topic)
each essay need a really strong intro with a hook to grab peoples attention.
General background information about the applicant :
-Age 17 years old MALE born and raised in the USA
-gender male
-Living in California
-work at grocery store ( bagging groceries)
-have been taking jiu jujitsu lessons for 3 years, currently blue belt
-Did Junior lifeguards program for 3 summers, and became a junior
lifeguard intern this past summer( requires a lot swimming, exercising on the
sand for 3 h, 5 days a week for 6 weeks during summer. You need to pass a
swimming test to get accepted into the program.
-played American football for the first year of high school and didn’t like
because he was overweight and had low self-esteem. jiujitsu helped to
overcome that and helped get close to his father that was very strict and had
hard time in showing love towards him.
-father is American, was in the military for a couple decades.
-mother is half Brazilian half Japanese.
-jiujitsu helped bridge the gap with mothers as well because jiujitsu is from Brazilian culture
-Self-taught Japanese because is one of the languages his mother speaks
( other than main language Portuguese).
Traveled with family to Japan last summer and was able to communicate with locals in Japanese,
in the future wants to do summer seminars in Japan if possible.
-had to work to help make ends at home.
-love learn about computer in his time off as well as play video games.
-got a 3-d printer at age 15 and love make 3 D small figures and have a
Online Esty store where sells figure to save money.
-is youngest of 3 siblings( 2 older sisters all current in college )
feel free to add some fictional info that fits to the essay.
1- Insight question for Essay #1:
Question #1: “Describe an example of your leadership experience in which you have
positively influenced others, helped resolve disputes, or contributed to group efforts over
time.”
Topic to be used : Junior Lifeguards Summer program (after 2 summer, became a helper intern last summer)
○ What is the program
○ The program entry test
● Conflicts
○ The exam on the first day
○ Not being in shape
○ Know no one in my group
● Overcoming conflict
○ Pier jumping ( the program had a pier jumping day which was the most fearful day for all the kids to jump due to height of the pier and the long swim back to shore after everyone from your group jumped)
○ Running several miles in a day
○ Making friends and helping them overcoming fear of jumping the pier
● Being an intern
○ Co-leading the group with the instructor
○ Helping the young group members
2-Insight question for Essay #2
Question 2: What would you say is your greatest talent or skill? How have you
developed and demonstrated that talent over time?
Topic to be used : Jiu Jitsu
○ Simple explanation of jiu jitsu
● The beginning
○ When i started 2 years ago
○ The first several classes
○ Surviving
● learning
○ Basic moves and skills
○ Improved breathing
○ Joining the adult class
● The present
○ Passing guards
○ Getting submitted by the higher belts
● The future
○ Improving my guard
○ perseverance
3-Insight question for Essay #3
Question 3: Describe the most significant challenge you have faced and the steps you
have taken to overcome this challenge. How has this challenge affected your academic
achievement?
Topic to be used : Self-Improvement
● Problems
○ Poor grades
○ Bad sleep
○ Out of shape and tired
○ Forced to do football
● Solutions
○ Stop slacking off for schoolwork
○ Improve sleep schedule
○ Endure football
○ Self evaluation
● Conclusion
○ Realize self-worth
○ Confidence
○ Aware of own capabilities
4-Insight question for Essay #4
Question 4: : Think about an academic subject that inspires you. Describe how you
have furthered this interest inside and/or outside of the classroom. ( Computer science is the major that I plan to apply to university)
Topic to be used : Computer Science
○ How/why you became interested in programming
● Development
○ Doing school programming classes
○ Class projects
○ Learning from online websites
● Potential and the future
○ Why you like computer science and tech so much
○ How you would connect this with your major