I WILL GIVE YOU THE DRAFT I WROTE, MAKE THE FOLLOWING CHANGES INTO IT ACCORDING

I WILL GIVE YOU THE DRAFT I WROTE, MAKE THE FOLLOWING CHANGES INTO IT ACCORDING

I WILL GIVE YOU THE DRAFT I WROTE, MAKE THE FOLLOWING CHANGES INTO IT ACCORDING TO MY TEACHER:
Upon reviewing your essay, I recommend including the following elements in your revised submission:
Please delve deeper into the dual causes of the shift in the racial composition within the CPS.
You rightly identified the disproportionately high number of African Americans during the time of the survey but neglected to explain the underlying factors behind this trend. For your revision, consider Clemens’ dual observations in the 1980s concurrent with the ‘Mariel boatlift.’ These aspects require further exploration in your next submission.
Expand on the two driving forces behind the bias towards lower average wages in Borjas’ sample.
You may also recognize the deficiencies in the data Borjas utilized. Building on this, could you elaborate on Clemens’ viewpoint regarding the particular demographic group genuinely impacted by immigration? Furthermore, are there any other consequences stemming from Borjas’ usage of ‘cherry-picked’ data? Your discussion on these points will enrich your revised submission.
You definitely need to add more details on your essay to show that you are able to correctly answer the questions.
PLEASE KEEP IT UNDER 2 PAGES, YOU CAN CHANGE STUFF BUT MAKE SURE YOU ARE FOLLOWING AND AGREEING WITH THE RUBRIC AND FOLLOWING WHAT MY TEACHER IS SAYING, ALL OF IT IS ATTACHED.